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Lights On by Yevette Shapiro

GROUP A - SCORE 74.5

JUDGES: Richard Waas 89 | Carlos Castaneda  63


 Critique of the Photo Titled "Lights On" Submitted to the Monochrome Competition


Impact:

This image makes an immediate impression with its clean geometric design and symmetry. The interplay of light and shadow, combined with the futuristic and abstract feel of the chandeliers, gives the photograph a modern and striking aesthetic. It effectively uses monochrome to emphasize contrast and create a visually compelling scene.


Presentation:

The chandeliers are well-presented, with sharp details and a clear emphasis on their circular symmetry. The reflection of the second chandelier in the glossy surface below adds depth and interest, though it feels slightly less defined than the primary chandelier. The background patterns of the ceiling enhance the abstract composition without overwhelming the subject.


Exposure:

The exposure is handled well, with the highlights on the light bulbs bright but not overexposed. The shadows in the background are rich and deep, ensuring the focus remains on the chandeliers. However, the reflective surfaces in the lower portion could use slight brightening to enhance the visibility of the second chandelier.


Composition:

The composition is strong, with the primary chandelier positioned prominently and its circular shape complemented by the repeating patterns in the background. The inclusion of the second chandelier's reflection adds another layer of complexity. A slight crop to remove excess negative space at the top could make the composition even tighter and more dynamic.


Technical Flaws:

  • The focus is sharp, capturing fine details in the chandeliers and reflections.
  • The tonal range is effective, though slightly more contrast in the reflective area would bring out additional detail.
  • No significant technical flaws are evident.

Distractions:

There are minimal distractions in the image. The repetitive patterns in the ceiling contribute to the abstract nature of the photograph rather than detracting from it. The lower chandelier reflection, while a strong element, could be slightly more defined for better balance.


Final Score:

Based on the scoring chart:

  • Impact: Strong, with a bold and modern aesthetic (+1 point deduction).
  • Presentation: Excellent, though refining the reflection area could enhance it further (+1 point deduction).
  • Exposure: Well-handled, but slight adjustments to contrast could improve the reflective details (+1 point deduction).
  • Composition: Strong, though cropping for tighter focus might improve balance (+2 points deduction).
  • Technical Flaws & Distractions: Minimal, with no major issues affecting the overall impact (+1 point deduction).

Final Score: 94 (Excellent - A well-done image)

This is a visually striking and modern photograph that effectively uses monochrome to enhance its abstract design. With minor adjustments to the reflection and composition, it could elevate to the superior category.


Original Score: 94
Revised Critique:

  • Impact: Visually striking but leans more on abstract design than emotional or storytelling resonance.
  • Presentation: The lower chandelier's reflection is underutilized, reducing the depth that it could contribute.
  • Composition: The top portion feels too empty, and a tighter crop would improve balance.

Revised Score: 89

 

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